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I Want to Be a Teacher

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  于莹 1992年毕业于山东师范大学,中学高级教师,山东省梁山县优秀教师,获市级优质课一等奖,一直从事初中英语的教学工作,连续多年在中考中取得优异成绩。2012年12月在山东省英语竞赛中荣获优秀指导教师称号。先后在《中学生英语》、《山东教育导报》、《现代中学生》、《初中生英语学习》、《英语辅导报》、《英语周报》、《学生导报》、《新课堂》等国家级、省级报刊上发表教学论文三十多篇。
  I Want to Be a Teacher
  “You want to be a teacher? Don’t be silly. Teachers are poorly paid and they have no power.” My friend was puzzling① when I told her I wanted to be a teacher in the future. I’m not silly and I’ll tell you my reasons.
  I’m determined to be a teacher because I have admired teachers very much since I was a little child. They are kind and respectable, like angels. They are learned, helpful and encouraging. I’m determined to be a teacher because teachers can lead us for② success. I’m determined to be a teacher because I can keep young and I can learn, change and grow up with my students. I’m determined to be a teacher because I like the style of teachers―simple but free. The vacations will offer me an opportunity for writing, doing research work and anything I like.
  I’ll try my best to be an ideal teacher. Firstly, I’ll study hardly③ to increase my knowledge and learn teaching skills. Secondly, I’ll love my students and take proud④ in my profession. Thirdly, I’ll trust in them, respect them and understand them.
  I believe that teaching is the most honorable job in the world. I’ll take it as my lifelong career. I will never regret my decision. I think my wish will come true. Do you think so?
  山东省梁山县杨营一中初二 高成浩
  1. 优点:
  本文以反意设问句开头,突出了主题。本文层次清晰,语言得当,衔接紧凑,说服力强,是一篇值得推荐的学生习作。
  2. 需要修改的地方:
  ① puzzling改为puzzled。修饰人时用puzzled,表示“感到疑惑的”;
  ② for改为to。lead to,固定搭配,表示“引起;导致;通向”;
  ③ hardly改为hard。hard意为“努力地”,hardly意为“几乎不”;
  ④ proud改为pride。take pride in等同于be proud of,意为“以……自豪”。
  3. 评分:
  按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准,本文修改前可得13分。

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